More talk

Since last weeks snippet was pretty popular, I thought I’d post one where we get to see what happens when Craig brings Carl back to his apartment and gets a really good look at those eyes —

He swam down into the depths of those solid forest green and sky blue eyes, eternal and limitless. The beat of his heart filled his entire body, drumming with a hard slow rhythm in his head, propelling him toward-something, he didn’t know what, scared, yet eager for it to happen.

How could one drown and be breathing in chorus?  He knew the depths of boundless love, lust and hatred that Carl was capable of, that Carl could make him feel.  Through an ivory filter, he saw a moving picture of Carl in medieval physician’s robes studying manuscripts, his beautiful profile illuminated by the light of a single candle.  He saw a dark shape behind Carl, slinking toward him with wild, mad eyes burning in its shadow face, covered by a cowl.

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26 thoughts on “More talk

  1. Chilling last line! I love your writing — the imagery is awesome.

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  2. That’s a lovely compliment–thank you 🙂

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  3. I agree. The imagery was simply stunning, and the switch from tender to terrifying was very smooth. I loved it. I want more!

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  4. Thank you very much 🙂 This scene was the beginning of Craig finally accepting that Carl was indeed what he claimed to be– he couldn’t argue with the vision 🙂

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  5. Wow, amazing description. Lovely snippet.

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  6. Wowey wowey love the description, and that ending…awesome just awesome!

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    1. Thank you 🙂 Carl’s maker is–a very dynamic being. I plan on introducing him later this summer 🙂

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  7. Oh wow. Beautiful and at the same time intensely creepy. Really nice snippet.

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  8. Thanks; that’s kind of what I was aiming for. Craig doesn’t know whether to be creeped out or aroused–I’m thinking it’s both 🙂

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  9. Uh, oh. Look out Carl!
    Nice snippet. 🙂

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    1. Thanks–alas, poor Carl was not made aware, but–at least he met Craig 🙂

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  10. The imagery here is wonderful and yet flirting with creepy. Loved it.

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  11. Thanks so much–that’s just what I was aiming for 🙂

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  12. excellent imagery–compelling lines…

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  13. I appreciate your kind compliment–I try to show, not tell 🙂

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  14. Swoony… and then… eek! Very compelling.

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    1. Thanks 🙂 Craig got to see how Carl was turned, and it was proof positive for him indeed.

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  15. I love this snippet! Those eyes have me memorized.

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    1. I’m glad you like it 🙂 Carl’s eyes definitely have that effect on people 🙂

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  16. So…who is that creeping up behind Carl? Very enjoyable snippet.

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    1. Thank You ! Well, that someone sneaking up behind Carl is the being that made him what he is today–

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  17. Beautiful description and very creepy ending!

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    1. Thanks so much for the kind words 🙂

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